Magenta Posted June 14, 2009 Share Posted June 14, 2009 This is beautiful. English is not my native language too,but we can write poems somehow,can't we? I really liked:Further words won't do, words are too weak to tell truth. Thank you very much!! Yes, of course we can, actually it is a lot easier for me to write a poem in english, rather in my own language!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spacewoman Posted June 14, 2009 Author Share Posted June 14, 2009 Well here is my humble try! And through this words I will struggle to express What my heart is afraid to confess And as you appeard as an angel -Guess you were just a stranger And what a stranger you were Black Dragon, Dark Angel Wonders dont do without danger! To come to save me, save you from yourself You bewitched me darling, and there is no help! And just to look and can not to touch To hold ones breath is pain too much In that suit- satin, white, shine I feel it is not over yet! Les Paul ripping through the night What I ve done and what I ve might With Black Beauty in those hands You can envy groupie for a one night stand Further words wont do, words are too weak to tell true! Beyond gorgeous, beyond excuse When you touch the bow I am Dazed & Confused With the bare chest fulled in sweat You made me honey in to Pagette Full of passion, full of talent Heart is beating faster, faster, fast!! And that smile of innocence Makes you blessed in presence And those lips pouted and kissable Makes you baby irresistible And to slide my hands through your hair Salute for all the ladies who have dared Eyes to die for, deep and dreamy Left to spoke is: OH JIMMY! sorry for mistakes because english is not my native language!! Hope you like it!! Wow, this war breathtaking and your English is excellent- it is not my native language either I totaly love the sentence about the one night stand with the groupie- only that idea makes me faint in excitment! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
aen27 Posted June 15, 2009 Share Posted June 15, 2009 Well here is my humble try! And through this words I will struggle to express What my heart is afraid to confess And as you appeard as an angel -Guess you were just a stranger And what a stranger you were Black Dragon, Dark Angel Wonders dont do without danger! To come to save me, save you from yourself You bewitched me darling, and there is no help! And just to look and can not to touch To hold ones breath is pain too much In that suit- satin, white, shine I feel it is not over yet! Les Paul ripping through the night What I ve done and what I ve might With Black Beauty in those hands You can envy groupie for a one night stand Further words wont do, words are too weak to tell true! Beyond gorgeous, beyond excuse When you touch the bow I am Dazed & Confused With the bare chest fulled in sweat You made me honey in to Pagette Full of passion, full of talent Heart is beating faster, faster, fast!! And that smile of innocence Makes you blessed in presence And those lips pouted and kissable Makes you baby irresistible And to slide my hands through your hair Salute for all the ladies who have dared Eyes to die for, deep and dreamy Left to spoke is: OH JIMMY! sorry for mistakes because english is not my native language!! Hope you like it!! OMG! I can feel the excitment too and it makes me about I love it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Magenta Posted June 15, 2009 Share Posted June 15, 2009 Wow, this war breathtaking and your English is excellent- it is not my native language either I totaly love the sentence about the one night stand with the groupie- only that idea makes me faint in excitment! Well thank you very much, I supose I had a very good material to be inspired with, when I wrote that poem!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Magenta Posted June 15, 2009 Share Posted June 15, 2009 OMG! I can feel the excitment too and it makes me about I love it. Thanks aen Well, words just came to me and It didnt took me long!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spacewoman Posted June 15, 2009 Author Share Posted June 15, 2009 Well thank you very much, I supose I had a very good material to be inspired with, when I wrote that poem!! With such a material like Jimmy you can make a true artwork- he is so gorgeous that you can write about him night and day- and you will always find something new... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jimmy's A Legend Posted June 15, 2009 Share Posted June 15, 2009 Well here is my humble try! And through this words I will struggle to express What my heart is afraid to confess And as you appeard as an angel -Guess you were just a stranger And what a stranger you were Black Dragon, Dark Angel Wonders dont do without danger! To come to save me, save you from yourself You bewitched me darling, and there is no help! And just to look and can not to touch To hold ones breath is pain too much In that suit- satin, white, shine I feel it is not over yet! Les Paul ripping through the night What I ve done and what I ve might With Black Beauty in those hands You can envy groupie for a one night stand Further words wont do, words are too weak to tell true! Beyond gorgeous, beyond excuse When you touch the bow I am Dazed & Confused With the bare chest fulled in sweat You made me honey in to Pagette Full of passion, full of talent Heart is beating faster, faster, fast!! And that smile of innocence Makes you blessed in presence And those lips pouted and kissable Makes you baby irresistible And to slide my hands through your hair Salute for all the ladies who have dared Eyes to die for, deep and dreamy Left to spoke is: OH JIMMY! sorry for mistakes because english is not my native language!! Hope you like it!! This is amazing, I love it!!! The words spoken by a true Pagette! Yeah I too write poems, the ones that she has created a graphic and put "Lucia Page" at the bottom are mine havn't written one for ages but now that my exams are over I will have to write some, I mean I can't be lazy all the time right? Please come up with some more....please I love this one so so much...please :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Magenta Posted June 15, 2009 Share Posted June 15, 2009 This is amazing, I love it!!! The words spoken by a true Pagette! Yeah I too write poems, the ones that she has created a graphic and put "Lucia Page" at the bottom are mine havn't written one for ages but now that my exams are over I will have to write some, I mean I can't be lazy all the time right? Please come up with some more....please I love this one so so much...please :D Thanks! Yes Lucy I know you write poems, I have read them all, and liked them very much, I am here for like 7 months, but wasnt logd in I will try to write something which includes Dog Collar (I think I know you like it) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jimmy's A Legend Posted June 16, 2009 Share Posted June 16, 2009 OK here is another one About the poem OK this poem is based on another which I wrote for my English GCSE Coursework folder. The poem is based on WWI and it is a description of the feelings and emotions that are running through the mind and heart of a woman whose lover (not husband) has been sent to the trenches. The missing of and the longing for him back is obvious I feel, in the original he has died in battle and she loves him she commits suicide so that she could be by his side again. My teacher here has written "it almost seems as though this is based on feelings of a real Jimmy" (yes I named my lover Jimmy ) I thought I would write this so that you can understand and feel the pain and to know how it is based, and to feel the love that she has as we Pagettes do for Pagey. My teacher made me leave out the 2nd half of the 1st stanza, I think you can work out why (and before you say "well duh she wanted you to get rid of it" she told us to express what we would TRUELY feel. I lie here, In this cold empty bed. I picture you in my thoughts and in my dreams; Of flashing lights that expose your body, Of sweat that drives me insane, Of a thought so desirable; It kills me. To make love with you once more; To feel your body and your heat, To feel your breath against my skin, To be with you when the sun rises. Just one more time. But now I lie here, In this cold empty bed; Watching the rain pour, and the frost spread on the window. Praying for the moment you would step through the door. Just one more time. As I search the stars at night, I hear it; The sound of the violin bow make love against your guitar. I hear it ringing in my mind; It rushes through my body, It pierces through my heart, The faster it becomes the weaker I become. As I search the stars at night, I hear the lonley wolf sing at your Presence; It howls true to it's master's call. Faster and faster the ringing becomes, Weaker and weaker I become. Driving me insane for you, For your love. I search for the answer each night I search and search and search, And now I know; I will always stay true to you. I will always be yours. I will always fall weak at your command. It is no curse of mine; It is love. A love that will never fade. Well hope you enjoyed that, I am writing some more. If anyone wishes to see the original PM me, if you don't I won't feel offended Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spacewoman Posted June 16, 2009 Author Share Posted June 16, 2009 OK here is another one About the poem OK this poem is based on another which I wrote for my English GCSE Coursework folder. The poem is based on WWI and it is a description of the feelings and emotions that are running through the mind and heart of a woman whose lover (not husband) has been sent to the trenches. The missing of and the longing for him back is obvious I feel, in the original he has died in battle and she loves him she commits suicide so that she could be by his side again. My teacher here has written "it almost seems as though this is based on feelings of a real Jimmy" (yes I named my lover Jimmy ) I thought I would write this so that you can understand and feel the pain and to know how it is based, and to feel the love that she has as we Pagettes do for Pagey. My teacher made me leave out the 2nd half of the 1st stanza, I think you can work out why (and before you say "well duh she wanted you to get rid of it" she told us to express what we would TRUELY feel. I lie here, In this cold empty bed. I picture you in my thoughts and in my dreams; Of flashing lights that expose your body, Of sweat that drives me insane, Of a thought so desirable; It kills me. To make love with you once more; To feel your body and your heat, To feel your breath against my skin, To be with you when the sun rises. Just one more time. But now I lie here, In this cold empty bed; Watching the rain pour, and the frost spread on the window. Praying for the moment you would step through the door. Just one more time. As I search the stars at night, I hear it; The sound of the violin bow make love against your guitar. I hear it ringing in my mind; It rushes through my body, It pierces through my heart, The faster it becomes the weaker I become. As I search the stars at night, I hear the lonley wolf sing at your Presence; It howls true to it's master's call. Faster and faster the ringing becomes, Weaker and weaker I become. Driving me insane for you, For your love. I search for the answer each night I search and search and search, And now I know; I will always stay true to you. I will always be yours. I will always fall weak at your command. It is no curse of mine; It is love. A love that will never fade. Well hope you enjoyed that, I am writing some more. If anyone wishes to see the original PM me, if you don't I won't feel offended Oh, Lucia you made my knees quite weak with this poem- even more, you made me quite sweaty and now I´m in the mood to watch some Jimmy DVD and dream about passionate love with him :wub: You described it excellent, all the desire and feelings for him I love it! And I would love to read the original- can you send it to my inbox, please? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Magenta Posted June 16, 2009 Share Posted June 16, 2009 OK here is another one About the poem OK this poem is based on another which I wrote for my English GCSE Coursework folder. The poem is based on WWI and it is a description of the feelings and emotions that are running through the mind and heart of a woman whose lover (not husband) has been sent to the trenches. The missing of and the longing for him back is obvious I feel, in the original he has died in battle and she loves him she commits suicide so that she could be by his side again. My teacher here has written "it almost seems as though this is based on feelings of a real Jimmy" (yes I named my lover Jimmy ) I thought I would write this so that you can understand and feel the pain and to know how it is based, and to feel the love that she has as we Pagettes do for Pagey. My teacher made me leave out the 2nd half of the 1st stanza, I think you can work out why (and before you say "well duh she wanted you to get rid of it" she told us to express what we would TRUELY feel. I lie here, In this cold empty bed. I picture you in my thoughts and in my dreams; Of flashing lights that expose your body, Of sweat that drives me insane, Of a thought so desirable; It kills me. To make love with you once more; To feel your body and your heat, To feel your breath against my skin, To be with you when the sun rises. Just one more time. But now I lie here, In this cold empty bed; Watching the rain pour, and the frost spread on the window. Praying for the moment you would step through the door. Just one more time. As I search the stars at night, I hear it; The sound of the violin bow make love against your guitar. I hear it ringing in my mind; It rushes through my body, It pierces through my heart, The faster it becomes the weaker I become. As I search the stars at night, I hear the lonley wolf sing at your Presence; It howls true to it's master's call. Faster and faster the ringing becomes, Weaker and weaker I become. Driving me insane for you, For your love. I search for the answer each night I search and search and search, And now I know; I will always stay true to you. I will always be yours. I will always fall weak at your command. It is no curse of mine; It is love. A love that will never fade. Well hope you enjoyed that, I am writing some more. If anyone wishes to see the original PM me, if you don't I won't feel offended Om my Lord, You didi it beautiful, bravo Lucia, A tear almost fall from my eye!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Magenta Posted June 16, 2009 Share Posted June 16, 2009 Ok here I go again, Lucia this one is for you!!! You want to be his Doll Yet that is what he ll never know You have fall under Fallen Angel s spell Oh how you wish to wore his smell You want to scream and weep and shriek Dancing like a madman in a very first row To see the Dark Lord in all his mighty glow To go backstage and have a private show And you woke up from a sleep Only thing you had was dream to make it real You beggd for something more But only thing that left was Dog Collar on the floor! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
_Lena_Zep Posted June 16, 2009 Share Posted June 16, 2009 Ok here I go again, Lucia this one is for you!!! You want to be his Doll Yet that is what he ll never know You have fall under Fallen Angel s spell Oh how you wish to wore his smell You want to scream and weep and shriek Dancing like a madman in a very first row To see the Dark Lord in all his mighty glow To go backstage and have a private show And you woke up from a sleep Only thing you had was dream to make it real You beggd for something more But only thing that left was Dog Collar on the floor! Oh please,why don't you become a poet?!You have to. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Heartbreaker_Girl Posted June 16, 2009 Share Posted June 16, 2009 OK here is another one About the poem OK this poem is based on another which I wrote for my English GCSE Coursework folder. The poem is based on WWI and it is a description of the feelings and emotions that are running through the mind and heart of a woman whose lover (not husband) has been sent to the trenches. The missing of and the longing for him back is obvious I feel, in the original he has died in battle and she loves him she commits suicide so that she could be by his side again. My teacher here has written "it almost seems as though this is based on feelings of a real Jimmy" (yes I named my lover Jimmy ) I thought I would write this so that you can understand and feel the pain and to know how it is based, and to feel the love that she has as we Pagettes do for Pagey. My teacher made me leave out the 2nd half of the 1st stanza, I think you can work out why (and before you say "well duh she wanted you to get rid of it" she told us to express what we would TRUELY feel. I lie here, In this cold empty bed. I picture you in my thoughts and in my dreams; Of flashing lights that expose your body, Of sweat that drives me insane, Of a thought so desirable; It kills me. To make love with you once more; To feel your body and your heat, To feel your breath against my skin, To be with you when the sun rises. Just one more time. But now I lie here, In this cold empty bed; Watching the rain pour, and the frost spread on the window. Praying for the moment you would step through the door. Just one more time. As I search the stars at night, I hear it; The sound of the violin bow make love against your guitar. I hear it ringing in my mind; It rushes through my body, It pierces through my heart, The faster it becomes the weaker I become. As I search the stars at night, I hear the lonley wolf sing at your Presence; It howls true to it's master's call. Faster and faster the ringing becomes, Weaker and weaker I become. Driving me insane for you, For your love. I search for the answer each night I search and search and search, And now I know; I will always stay true to you. I will always be yours. I will always fall weak at your command. It is no curse of mine; It is love. A love that will never fade. Well hope you enjoyed that, I am writing some more. If anyone wishes to see the original PM me, if you don't I won't feel offended This is... is... is... UH-MAZE-ING!! So beautiful! Wow, just... wow. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jimmy's A Legend Posted June 17, 2009 Share Posted June 17, 2009 Ok here I go again, Lucia this one is for you!!! You want to be his Doll Yet that is what he ll never know You have fall under Fallen Angel s spell Oh how you wish to wore his smell You want to scream and weep and shriek Dancing like a madman in a very first row To see the Dark Lord in all his mighty glow To go backstage and have a private show And you woke up from a sleep Only thing you had was dream to make it real You beggd for something more But only thing that left was Dog Collar on the floor! Oh this is wonderful! And totally agree with those lines And I love the last line too Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Magenta Posted June 17, 2009 Share Posted June 17, 2009 Oh this is wonderful! And totally agree with those lines And I love the last line too Thanks!! Glad you like it!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Levee Posted June 18, 2009 Share Posted June 18, 2009 Here's my..... (cough)...... poem. Some friends of mine, just the other night Went to hear this cool cat play They said he played so good that the roof fell in And he didn't even stop the show They don't remember the place, But they remember the face, And now everybody wanna go. Woo! Top Jimmy cooks! Top Jimmy swings! He's got the look! Woo! Top Jimmy, he's the king! Jimmy on the television Famous people on there with him named Ross Jimmy on the news at five! Jimmy on the radio and even on the video The baddest cat alive! Drivin' all the women crazy All they want is Jimmy baby Love it when he rolls his eyes! Too bad he got screwed over by Robert and that Country woman! Top Jimmy cooks! Top Jimmy swings! He's got the look! Top Jimmy, Woo! Shake it baby! Oh! Juke joint Jimmy is the latest thing He's got the sound that everybody digs! Yeah the joint be jumpin' When the band be pumpin' and you know they play a crazy gig! Well, you ain't been livin' Till you seen the livin' end Satanic messages are the boss! Ow, Top Jimmy cooks! Top Jimmy swings! He's got the look! Top Jimmy, Oh Jimmy Top Jimmy Go Jimmy Top Jimmy Ow! He's the king! Oh, Jimmy! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
songbird Posted June 18, 2009 Share Posted June 18, 2009 Here's my..... (cough)...... poem. Some friends of mine, just the other night Went to hear this cool cat play They said he played so good that the roof fell in And he didn't even stop the show They don't remember the place, But they remember the face, And now everybody wanna go. Woo! Top Jimmy cooks! Top Jimmy swings! He's got the look! Woo! Top Jimmy, he's the king! Jimmy on the television Famous people on there with him named Ross Jimmy on the news at five! Jimmy on the radio and even on the video The baddest cat alive! Drivin' all the women crazy All they want is Jimmy baby Love it when he rolls his eyes! Too bad he got screwed over by Robert and that Country woman! Top Jimmy cooks! Top Jimmy swings! He's got the look! Top Jimmy, Woo! Shake it baby! Oh! Juke joint Jimmy is the latest thing He's got the sound that everybody digs! Yeah the joint be jumpin' When the band be pumpin' and you know they play a crazy gig! Well, you ain't been livin' Till you seen the livin' end Satanic messages are the boss! Ow, Top Jimmy cooks! Top Jimmy swings! He's got the look! Top Jimmy, Oh Jimmy Top Jimmy Go Jimmy Top Jimmy Ow! He's the king! Oh, Jimmy! Levee you just melt my heart. Best in this thread by far. :'( Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Magenta Posted June 18, 2009 Share Posted June 18, 2009 Here's my..... (cough)...... poem. Some friends of mine, just the other night Went to hear this cool cat play They said he played so good that the roof fell in And he didn't even stop the show They don't remember the place, But they remember the face, And now everybody wanna go. Woo! Top Jimmy cooks! Top Jimmy swings! He's got the look! Woo! Top Jimmy, he's the king! Jimmy on the television Famous people on there with him named Ross Jimmy on the news at five! Jimmy on the radio and even on the video The baddest cat alive! Drivin' all the women crazy All they want is Jimmy baby Love it when he rolls his eyes! Too bad he got screwed over by Robert and that Country woman! Top Jimmy cooks! Top Jimmy swings! He's got the look! Top Jimmy, Woo! Shake it baby! Oh! Juke joint Jimmy is the latest thing He's got the sound that everybody digs! Yeah the joint be jumpin' When the band be pumpin' and you know they play a crazy gig! Well, you ain't been livin' Till you seen the livin' end Satanic messages are the boss! Ow, Top Jimmy cooks! Top Jimmy swings! He's got the look! Top Jimmy, Oh Jimmy Top Jimmy Go Jimmy Top Jimmy Ow! He's the king! Oh, Jimmy! Hey I liked it, so groovey, nice one, keep on !!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
_Lena_Zep Posted June 18, 2009 Share Posted June 18, 2009 Here's my..... (cough)...... poem. Some friends of mine, just the other night Went to hear this cool cat play They said he played so good that the roof fell in And he didn't even stop the show They don't remember the place, But they remember the face, And now everybody wanna go. Woo! Top Jimmy cooks! Top Jimmy swings! He's got the look! Woo! Top Jimmy, he's the king! Jimmy on the television Famous people on there with him named Ross Jimmy on the news at five! Jimmy on the radio and even on the video The baddest cat alive! Drivin' all the women crazy All they want is Jimmy baby Love it when he rolls his eyes! Too bad he got screwed over by Robert and that Country woman! Top Jimmy cooks! Top Jimmy swings! He's got the look! Top Jimmy, Woo! Shake it baby! Oh! Juke joint Jimmy is the latest thing He's got the sound that everybody digs! Yeah the joint be jumpin' When the band be pumpin' and you know they play a crazy gig! Well, you ain't been livin' Till you seen the livin' end Satanic messages are the boss! Ow, Top Jimmy cooks! Top Jimmy swings! He's got the look! Top Jimmy, Oh Jimmy Top Jimmy Go Jimmy Top Jimmy Ow! He's the king! Oh, Jimmy! More,please,more! I want more of this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moonmaid Posted June 18, 2009 Share Posted June 18, 2009 Ha ha! Levee I love it! How about..."Got it bad, got it bad, got it bad...I'm hot for Jimmy?" or "Jimmy the night away!" or "Oh, whoa, whoa, Jimmy's cryin' (*bout, bow*)" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Knebby Posted June 19, 2009 Share Posted June 19, 2009 Levee, I always said you were....y'know......special. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
_Lena_Zep Posted June 19, 2009 Share Posted June 19, 2009 Oh finally nice and 'clean' poetry thread! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Levee Posted June 19, 2009 Share Posted June 19, 2009 Here's another one of my .......(Cough)......originals. Jimmy played the guitar, longed to be a big star, But Jimmy didn't have a song to play Jimmy sang sweet and Jimmy looked neat, But Jimmy didn't have a song to play Until one day Jimmy ran into A little songwriter named Alison She was just finished dumping a Golden God She had a brand new tune he dug, And all at once they fell in love, Now Jimmy's singing Jimmy's song, ev'rybody's crazy 'bout it, Jimmy's song, they're buying lots of records of it, Jimmy's song, all the girls are flipin' over Jimmy's song, whoo, whoo, whoo... Jimmy's song, whoo, whoo, whoo.. Jimmy's song, written by Alison Whooo, whoo, whoo..... Now, Jimmy's got a Cadillac, Alison's got a Cadillac And a great big wedding ring They've got a cottage out in the country With a swimming pool and everything But that ain't all that they have got 'Cause they've got a brand new little tot named Ross Alison thinks it's awfully sweet When Jimmy rocks Ross to sleep, singing Jimmy's song, lul-a-lul-a-lul-a-bye Jimmy's song, lul-a-lul-a-lul-a-bye Jimmy's song, lul-a-lul-a, don't cha cry Jimmy's song, whoo, whoo, whoo... Jimmy's song, goo, goo, goo, goo Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ninelives Posted June 19, 2009 Share Posted June 19, 2009 :D Levee!!!!!! You rock Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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